A linguist who reviewed my work at the request of a book club found it to be consistent with an older dialect and sentence formation. They informed me I had written it in what’s known as King’s Speak or King’s English which isn’t commonly used today.
Actually I was aware of that. I used the older style to add poetic depths to the story so the characters would not appear flat and one dimensional.
It’s difficult to expression complex emotions using short, clipped sentences. I’m aware that’s the most popular literary writing style used today however I feel that due to the complexity of the emotional state of humans, it is impossible to express the different nuances of feelings and experiences using this style popular, clipped style. There are some writers who can do this with a few words but I felt that my characters were better represented painting a fuller picture.
————-King’s English or King Speak————————
a jerking and twitching of the body
The body was jerking and twitching.